Friday, 29 June 2018

Another Time, Another Place

We have recently been writing a story based off a picture from a book called The Mysteries of Harris Burdick.

After what seemed like hours they were at the middle of the causeway. “Do we need to go to the party?” questioned Jeff.
“Shut your big loud mouth, Jeff!” yelled Frank. They continued on their way to the party. 
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  1. AnonymousFriday, June 29, 2018

    You've used some adverbial phrases of time like, "After what seemed like hours", very effectively.
    I especially like your description of the setting in the first paragraph because it helps to create a picture in my mind: "The mist slowly started to lift revealing the castle and the hills that lined the lake."
    I'd have liked to read some more detail about how the group was rescued; remember, the ending is just as important as the beginning.

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