You've used some adverbial phrases of time like, "After what seemed like hours", very effectively. I especially like your description of the setting in the first paragraph because it helps to create a picture in my mind: "The mist slowly started to lift revealing the castle and the hills that lined the lake." I'd have liked to read some more detail about how the group was rescued; remember, the ending is just as important as the beginning.
You've used some adverbial phrases of time like, "After what seemed like hours", very effectively.
ReplyDeleteI especially like your description of the setting in the first paragraph because it helps to create a picture in my mind: "The mist slowly started to lift revealing the castle and the hills that lined the lake."
I'd have liked to read some more detail about how the group was rescued; remember, the ending is just as important as the beginning.