Cycle safety
We just finished the safety stuff, now it’s party time! I line up on the yellow line by the court. I am at the back of the line which means I need to wait what feels like forever. I’m ready to go now. I start to go slowly before I gradually pick up speed then I circle to make sure there is no one in front of me. I start to go very fast then jump off the see-saw. I then go around the corner then speed up to jump again. When I jump, then turn to zig-zag, I hit the ladder and it feels like an earthquake waking me up in the middle of the night. I’m back at the end of the line now. I wait, I wait a little, a little bit more, come on this is getting boring! I wait a little more, come on, this is taking forever! I’m at the front now. I start like a race car. Zooming down the zig-zags, I go speeding round the corner, trying to take off. I fly off the see-saw then slow down slightly to stop then start to zoom off again. I come to the back of the line and now it’s time to wait.
Hi there, my name is Callum and I am a student in room manakau at waikowhai primary School. I really like how you wrote about yourself and wrote a poem about cycling It made me think of riding my bike on the path with my family. it was really fun. Have you thought about putting more detail and your school . your lovely friends and a video and your face because i can't really see.it. If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://www.wpscallumt.blogspot.co.nz.
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Hi Alex, it's Liam here. I liked the way you described what you are doing. I really liked the bit when you went over the ladder you said it was like an earthquake waking you up in the middle of the night. Next time you could use paragraphs to break up your work.
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Hi Liam, Alex here thanks for your comment.
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